They write in their dull books like martyrs while
searching for some obtuse figure – some god
to place their faith in. Bibles fill their eyes.
The new, they find it easier to type;
they Google lives. They trade their minds as they
right click, left click, and double click and shift.
A caps lock diety to not worship,
a Kierkegaard ctrl and alt delete.
My HTML religion never
condemns for sins, it seeks an existence,
a place to know I am and I can be.
I am the newest generation and
the absurd. They say ‘theology saves’
I say ‘to whom shall I make my complaint?’
Are we not all the Sisyphus today?
I’m free from reality in role play,
in instant messaging. Still they tell me
to pick up Bibles, pray. I can’t work out
the lingo and the slang. GTFO!
We symbolize life now with signs instead
of crosses, blood, bodies, and rosaries.
Now, less than three is more than religion –
more than anything and everything yet
still they tell me Jesus walked on water
but not across my keyboard. lol
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lol.
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non sum qualis eram
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non sum qualis eram
the first thing that i noticed was of course all the net slang, so it made me wonder does proper punctuation here work with or against the piece?
i felt that "the new" in line four felt too dramatic;
i love "they Google lives. They trade their minds as they
right click, left click," definitely my favourite line, has such a moody rhythm to it, and i wish you would consider refining how you end it because and double click and shift really breaks the flow of it.
i think the last stanza needs a bit of clarification and/or elaboration. but that last line is a great way to end this poem! (keyboard has no space though)
very creative, nice work!
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it's strange. i hardly ever use punctuation in my poetry, however, i wanted the new generation to come off as having thier own 'language' but still seem literate. also, think it contrasts the slang. maybe not...
i'll consider that but i kind of like it.
actually, the entire poem is in blank verse. thus, that line is in iambic pentameter so it should flow. i can see where it may throw you off though. it is a bit fudged.
hmm... yeah, it may not make much sense to someone who is not familiar with internet lingo (<3). i meant it to be for a target audience of young people but i could try to make it more universal. (i thought so but spell check kept changing it; i fixed it.)
thank you for the honest remarks!
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non sum qualis eram
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